Lesson video

Hi everyone, it's me, Ms. Chu.

In this lesson, you will be learning to write your own newspaper report, to free write lesson which means you're going to use everything that you've learnt in this unit and put it into practise.

So you're going to be just writing your own newspaper without me scaffolding and supporting you every step of the way.

Which I think it's really exciting.

So when you're ready, we can begin.

What will you need for this lesson? You need an exercise book or paper, pen or pencil and to be super alert, because you're going to be doing a lot of planning, a lot of writing, you need to have your thinking head switched on today.

What's the agenda, so we'll always start, if we can with a writing warm up or some kind of warm up to get our hands going to get our brains going, then we will plan a newspaper report 'cause we can't just write one straight away, we've got to think about how we're going to write it and that's done through the planning process.

Then we'll make notes and then we will write our newspaper reports.

Writing warmup.

For this writing warm up, you will need to watch this clip.

This clip will help us to write our sentences.

So when you're ready, I will press play.

We're slowing down.

No.

A really exciting clip.

If you need to watch this clip again, just remember you can rewind.

Now we are going to write a complex sentence with a relative clause, based on that clip.

Any part of that clip, if you want to remind yourself what happens in the clip, you may go back and watch it now.

If you know what you want to write, you may begin.

So with our relative clause, we're going to use a who to support us in our subordinate clause.

We're going to start with the person who we're talking about.

So it could be Spider-Man, it could be one of the passengers.

One of the passengers who was at the back of the carriage, carry on the sentence.

Remember the part in the pink is the relative clauses the who clause, The part in the black line is the main clause.

Pause the video now and have a go.

Brilliant, I hope you've managed to have a go.

Here is my complex sentence with a relative clause.

One of the passengers, comma, who was near the back of the train, commented that she knew who it was that helped to stop the train.

I wonder what sentence you have written.

Would be lovely if you could share it with a parent or a carer.

Now we are going to practise writing a sentence with brackets.

One of the carriages, brackets, giving me extra information.

Down here whether there are two sort of curves that's where you're giving your extra information, was found.

Pause the video and have a go if you need to watch back you can rewind and come back to this point in the lesson.

Here's my sentence with brackets.

One of the carriages, which was carrying at least 25 passengers was found suspended in the air by a high strength sticky substance.

Brackets again, later identified as a type of spider's web.

So we've use brackets twice here, because I'm giving extra information about the now.

So I've said, which was carrying at least 25 passengers that's giving me extra information about the carriages, one of the carriages, Later identified as a type of spider's web.

I'm giving extra information about the sticky substance, so that's the purpose of brackets.

If you took out the bracket, the sentence would still make sense.

Planning.

Your newspaper report is going to be based on this clip, the clip you just watched.

So, I'd like you to watch again really, really carefully this time because you're going to be writing a newspaper report about what has just happened here.

When you're ready, I will press pay.

We're slowing down.

No.

Very, very exciting.

We have to imagine that this has just happened in the city.

You could choose anything city you like.

Now because we are journalists, we need to gather information to write our reports.

How do we do that? I remember from before, we can gather information from police statements.

We can also gather information from a police station.

Maybe they will have a list of events that happened.

A recount of events, the times which these things happen.

Then maybe we would go to the forensic lab to see if we could identify who the person in the outfit was that helped to stop the train.

Spider-Man, we know it's Spider-Man, maybe they can help us to identify who he is.

We will also go to the emergency switchboard, maybe someone saw how it first started.

Because we don't know, just from that clip, we don't actually know how that train started to derail or go out, or get out of control.

Did anyone see anything? Who was there at the time, who was in the carriage? Who happened to be in the buildings that saw the train go past? We could ask them what they saw.

Now you will take notes, you will make notes.

You will make notes using bullet points, key words and phrases and in chronological order.

I want you to really, really have a long pause here because this is part of your planning process.

You are now going to think really carefully about what has happened.

You want to start with maybe a time of the day, when did it happen morning, afternoon, evening, and then maybe give it more of a specific time.

You might want to say how the train started to get out of control, if you know why.

Maybe they've done investigations and they've worked out what caused the train to get out of control.

Then you can introduce how Spider-Man came along and helped as well.

And then finally, of course at the train was safe and everyone, no one was hurt, no one was injured.

So those are kind of the main events in that video, but you need to break down each step and give each part of that clip a little bit more detail, give the audience, give the members of the public more information.

You really need to pause the video for a long time now and have a go at this.

Well done, I hope you've had a really good go at planning your newspaper report because now it is time to write it.

I've drawn up a success criteria to help you.

You will need to think of a headline, a snappy short headline to draw the reader into your report, to make them want to read more.

Number two, you need to write an introductory paragraph with your five W's and we will go over what the five W's are.

Think of some time conjunctions to sequence the events.

Give some detailed facts.

Use brackets for additional information.

Write some journalistic sentence starters at the beginning of your sentences.

Use direct and indirect speech, accurate, accurately punctuated.

And lastly, in your newspaper report, I would love to see a complex sentence with a relative clause because we've done lots of practise with that.

So here is a headline, an example of a headline.

Uncontrollable passenger train saved by local hero.

You need to think of one for your newspaper report, something short, but informative.

What is the main thing about? It's a train, it was out of control, but it was saved by local hero.

Okay, something along those lines.

I'm sure you can think of something a lot snappier than mine.

In your introductory paragraph, you need to write the five W's.

Do you remember what they are? It's the who, what, where, when, and why.

Who was involved? Passengers on a train.

What happened? A train went out of control.

Where did it happen? You can give specific details.

I'm not going to tell you, you can decide that for yourself.

When did it happen? Again, you can decide and why did it happen? You choose.

Journalistic sentence starters.

Remember we looked at this in our unit.

What's appropriate for a newspaper, what's not appropriate for a newspaper but is appropriate for narrative.

We've got these.

We are not to use the narrative sentence starters because they are not journalistic.

Don't worry about those.

We will look at the pink, the ones in bold.

It is confirmed, your turn.

Many people believe.

Several witnesses stated.

According to.

Perfect, well done.

And I also mentioned that you need to include some speech.

Remember from last time, we wrote, we use some direct speech which meant that we needed to use our speech punctuation.

That is using your inverted commas, capital letter, your speech, and then your punctuation and ending with an inverted comma.

And remember there are three types of speech that you can use.

Speech first, speech second and interrupted speech.

This is an example of direct speech.

Wonder if you know what example of speech this is.

Pause the video read it through.

Why have I highlighted the words in pink? Tell me.

That's right, it's because it is an example of indirect or reported speech.

It doesn't have inverted commas.

It doesn't have speech punctuation, because we are using indirect and reported speech, we have to say that he had or refer to the person who's speaking as he, in third person, not as written in first person.

Amazing, now is your turn to write a newspaper report.

I know you can do this, we've done it many, many times.

We've practised in our writing warm ups, and now it is your turn to just give it a go.

You're going to have your headline, your opening paragraph.

This is the structure, you're going to recount the events.

You're going to write your witness statements and then your last paragraph is about the current situation.

Pause the video now, write this down so that you know the order in which you have to write your newspaper report.

After you've written this down, I want you to have a go.

So you're going to continue to pause the video after I've spoken.

And I'd like you to now give it a really good go and write your newspaper report.

Good luck, enjoy, have fun.

I look forward to seeing your reports later.

Brilliant, I hope you really enjoyed writing your newspaper reports.

Now it is time to read back your writing.

Remember, these are the reasons why we need to read it back.

You've got to check that it makes sense.

You've got an enjoy it, of course, we've got to enjoy it.

We've got to make sure you've got the purpose right, check the language and punctuation.

Use precise vocabulary, spelling mistakes and have we got the tone right? Is it a newspaper report? We haven't gone off and written a story, hopefully not.

We're getting the text hope correct.

You need to check that.

Pause the video now and just read back your writing.

Wow, wow, wow, you have worked so hard today.

We practised in our writing warmup writing a complex sentence with a relative clause, and we wrote a sentence with brackets.

Then we did this huge mammoth bit of planning for our newspaper report and we made notes and then you guys, you did some amazing writing.

So I am really looking forward to you sharing your learning and your writing with Oak National.

Please ask your parent or carer for permission first before you share your work.

And you can do so on Instagram, Facebook or Twitter, making sure you tag @OakNational and hashtag Learn with Oak.

We cannot, cannot, cannot wait to see your writing.