Lesson video

How are you doing today? In this lesson, we're going to be writing the build up, part two, of "The Highwayman." So I hope that you're sitting somewhere comfortably, and I hope you're feeling confident and I hope that you're feeling ready to write.

In this lesson, you will need an exercise book or some paper, a pencil or a pen, your brain, and there's one other thing that you need, remember, we're writing today, we're writing the second part of the build up.

What did we do in the last lesson? We planned it.

So you definitely need your plan.

If you haven't got everything you need, pause the video, go and collect it, and I will see you when you're ready.

So we will start off with a writing warm up, then we will prepare to write, then we'll write each section in parts, and then you will read back your writing aloud.

So for our writing warm up you have to choose the correct spelling.

I've got five words on the screen for you.

Listened, waved, beautiful, sincerely, and promised.

Have a really good look at the screen, there are two different spellings of the word, you have to write down the correct one.

Pause the video now.

Shall we check? Okay.

Look really closely.

First one listened.

Give it a tick if you got that correct, L-I-S-T-E-N-E-D.

Waved, W-A-V-E-D, give it a tick if you got that, change it if you didn't, and that's absolutely fine.

Beautiful, you can see the spelling there, B-E-A-U-T-I-F-U-L.

Give it a tick if you got it, change it if you didn't.

And sincerely, S-I-N-C-E-R-E-L-Y.

Tick it if you got it, change it if you didn't.

And finally, promised.

P-R-O-M-I-S-E-D.

If you need to pause the video and go and correct any of them, do that now, please.

Okay, so let's get ready to write.

Have you got your plan? Show me? Thank you.

So what's the order that we're writing in? What's the first thing we're writing about? Have a look at your plan, check what it says.

Oh yeah, it's Tim listening to the highwayman speaking.

The second thing, the highwayman greeted Bess, then, he told her he was going to steal some gold.

And the fourth thing, the fourth part of our build up is that he promised he would be back soon.

So let's have a thinking term question.

What skills do you need to use in your writing to be successful? Have a really good think, what are you going to try really hard to do in your writing today? Think, say, write, read every sentence? That is definitely really important.

We're going to choose precise vocabulary.

You worked really, really hard on this over the last few lessons by thinking really carefully about exactly what word to use to fit the purpose of the sentence, and choosing the best possible word to do that.

Then, think about different sentence starters, okay? So we've also had lots of practise on this.

Thinking about accurate punctuation, including, if you are writing speech, which we've done lots of practise on, as well.

And thinking about different sentence types.

Thinking about whether the sentence should be a simple sentence or a compound sentence or a complex sentence.

Did you get anything else? Tell me if you did.

Thank you.

So we will write our build up in short sections, one at a time.

Let's look at your plan and really have a good look at what precise vocabulary choices you made, how did you describe Tim? Where was he? What was he doing? I can see I've got on mine crouched quietly, listened intently, spied stealthily.

So you've got tonnes of amazing ideas on your plan.

Have a really good look now at this first bit, the bit that Tim is listening, and that will really help us when we come to write.

So it'll be my turn to do some writing, and then you'll have your go at doing your writing for this part.

I'm going to start my paragraph by introducing Tim and where he is.

I can see some prepositional phrases in my plan, in the stables, behind the door, so I might use one of those.

I think I'll start off with a few yards away in the stable, Tim, who was the dishevelled ostler spied stealthily on what was happening in the inn yard.

A few yards away, comma after my prepositional phrase, in the stable, Tim, who was the dishevelled, going to check my plan for that spelling, D-I-S-H-E-V-E-L-L-E-D ostler, remember that means stableboy, someone who looks after the horses, spied stealthily.

Just check the spelling in my plans, stealthily on what was happening in the inn yard.

And then one more sentence, maybe an as complex sentence to show how he felt about what he was hearing as he listened intently to the conversation, he couldn't believe what he was hearing.

As he listened intently, I've just used that straight from my plan, to the conversation, now what do I need after my subordinate clause? Oh yeah, I need a comma, he couldn't believe what he was hearing.

Going to read back my sentences.

A few yards away, comma, in the stable, comma, Tim, comma, who was the dishevelled ostler, comma, spied stealthily on what was happening in the inn yard.

As, oh I forgot a word here.

As he listened intently to the conversation, he couldn't believe what he was hearing.

So I've written my first few sentences.

Get ready to do your first few sentences.

And I want you to think about the skills to be successful, the most important four skills for this writing.

Think, say, write, read every sentence.

Choose the most precise descriptive language.

Choose the most precise verbs and adverbs, and of course, make sure that you're using accurate punctuation.

What have you got to have right next to you as you're writing? What do I have right next to me? I have my plan.

So you need to make sure that you have your plan right next to you.

I'd like you to pause the video now, and take a few minutes, or however long you need to write this section.

Pause the video now.

So the next bit that we're writing about is the highwayman greeting Bess.

Now in the poem, he says "One kiss, my bonny sweetheart." And we thought about lots of really good and precise vocabulary choices for this, including what each of the characters did, what happened, he blew her a kiss, he said "Hello, my love." He smiled joyfully, he waved eagerly, so I'm going to do a little bit of writing and again, follow along really carefully.

So this next bit is where the highwayman greets Bess.

So I think I'm going to start off with some speech, and I can see my plan, I plan to say "Hello, my love." Hello, my love, the highwayman called up to her, and I think I need a bit of prepositional detail.

Where was he? So he called up to her from below her window.

And I checked my plan, there, to see what prepositional phrases I had.

So I need to start off with my inverted commas, capital letter, hello my love.

Now what do I need? Before my closing inverted commas I need a comma.

"Hello, my love," the highwayman called up to her from below her window.

So the next thing, I just want to give a little bit more detail about what they both did, and I can see some ideas in my plan.

Blew her a kiss, smiled joyfully, waved eagerly.

So I think I'm going to use two of those ideas in one complex sentence.

As he blew her a kiss, comma, she waved eagerly back to him.

As he blew her a kiss, comma after my subordinate clause, she waved eagerly, check the spelling in that plan, E-A-G-E-R-L-Y, yep, got that, back to him.

And I'll read my sentences back.

"Hello, my love," the highwayman called up to her from below her window.

As he blew her a kiss, she waved eagerly back to him.

I hope you're feeling ready to write your next few sentences.

Here is a reminder of our skills to be successful.

There's a reminder to have your plan right next to you.

So take a few minutes now and write down your sentences for this part, the part where the highwayman greeted Bess.

Pause the video now, and I'll see you when you're ready.

Pause the video now, and I'll see you when you've written those sentences.

Pause the video now, and I'll see you when you've written your sentences.

Okay, we're on part number three, we're doing so well.

So this is the bit where he tells her he's going off to rob someone.

Look really closely at your plan, what great vocabulary have you got there? What precise vocabulary choices, what happened, and also what was Tim's reaction? I can see on my plan that I said he clenched his fists in anger as he overheard the highwayman tell Bess that he was off to steal some gold.

So it's my turn to do my bit of writing.

Watch really carefully, and listen really carefully and then it will be your turn after that.

Now we have to talk about the highwayman telling Bess that he's off to steal something.

So I'm going to start off with a non-finite clause to show my reader what he was doing as he was talking to her and I'm going to choose a verb from my plan, gazed, but I'll turn it into gazing, gazing lovingly? Think I'm going to use gazing affectionately at Bess, comma, he explained that he was off to steal from wealthy travellers.

I saw the words wealthy travellers in my plan.

Gazing affectionately at Bess, comma after my subordinate clause, my non-finite subordinate clause, he explained that he was off to steal from wealthy travellers.

My next sentence is going to show what Tim's reaction was.

Tim felt angry, and I can see some show, not tell, I've planned in there, clenched his fists.

And I'm going to start off with an adverbial opener.

Angrily, comma, Tim clenched his fists as he overheard this.

Angrily, comma, Tim clenched his fists as he overheard this.

Going to read my sentences back.

Gazing affectionately at Bess, comma, he explained that he was off to steal from wealthy travellers.

Angrily, comma, Tim clenched his fists as he overheard this.

So I've written my next few sentences and I hope you're feeling ready to write your next few sentences now.

Okay, you've got your skills to be successful there as a reminder, I hope you've got your plan still next to you.

And I'd like you to pause the video now and write down your sentences for this part.

And I'll see you when you've done that.

Pause the video now.

Okay, we're onto the final bit, which is where he promised her he'd be back soon.

He says, I shall be back with yellow gold.

Really have a good look at your plan, now.

Have a look at mine all on the screen if you'd like as well.

Think about when he said he'd be back, think about what he said he'd bring Bess back, so coins, or jewellery, think about how he said that, did he vow sincerely? Did he promise? And then, what did he do straight after that? I thought he jumped back on his horse, he prepared to leave, off into the night.

So it's my turn to do my sentences, and watch, and listen really carefully.

I'm going to start my sentence with what the highwayman said to Bess.

What's he telling her? He's saying, well I promise I'll be back.

When would he be back? I'm going to check my plan and I can see the words sunrise, by sunrise.

I'll be back before sunrise, and I will bring you a beautiful gold necklace.

So this is speech, I've got to remember my inverted commas.

Capital letter, apostrophe L-L because we're contracting the words I will into I'll.

I'll be back before sunrise, and I will bring you a beautiful gold necklace, comma, close inverted commas.

Could choose my verb from my plan, he vowed, my adverb sincerely.

Check the plan for that spelling, yes, that looks great.

And then the final sentence is just going to be what he then did.

So he really got ready to leave, didn't he? He jumped back on his horse, he prepared to leave, maybe he gave her one final look, one final glance.

So I could start my sentence with a final glance, comma, he leapt back on his horse.

With a final glance, he leapt back on his horse.

And to read my sentences back.

I'll be back before sunrise and I will bring you a beautiful gold necklace, he vowed sincerely.

With a final glance, he leapt back on his horse.

So I've written my final sentences, so I hope you're feeling ready to write your final few sentences of this paragraph.

Here's your reminder about your skills to be successful, and here's your reminder to have your plan.

I'd like you to pause the video now and write your final sentences for the build up part two.

So I'll see you when you've done that.

Pause the video now.

Wow, you've written all of your paragraphs.

Well done.

So the next part of our lesson, the next and final part of our lesson is a focus on reading back our writing.

Why do we need to read our writing back? We've had this question before, and I bet you can tell me lots of reasons why.

Go on, tell me your reason.

Thank you.

These are the ones that we've thought of already from previous lessons.

To check it makes sense, to get a sense of being the reader and what the reader feels like, to make sure we've got the purpose right, to check and change punctuation errors, to check we've used the most precise vocabulary, and to check and change spelling errors in case we've made any of those.

But the most important reason, what is it? Yeah, to enjoy it.

And to feel really proud of ourselves as writers.

So you can pause the video now and read back your whole paragraph, and enjoy it.

And I'll see you when you've done that.

Oh my goodness me, you have worked so hard.

We did a writing warmup, we got ready to write, and then you wrote each section in parts, and then you read aloud your writing back to yourself.

I think you've worked incredibly hard.

Well done.

And it'd be great if you'd like to, to ask your parent or carer to share your writing on Instagram, or Facebook, or Twitter, tagging @OakNational, and #LearnwithOak, so that you can share your writing with lots and lots of people, and I would really, really love to see it.

And I'll see you again very soon.

Have a lovely rest of your day.