Lesson video

Hi everyone! Miss Brittain here for your 9th lesson in this unit and our final day of writing.

In today's lesson, we are going to finish off writing our recycled story.

We'll start off with our nursery rhyme, then we'll do a box plan recap and read over what we've already written and then we'll finish writing our story.

For this lesson you will need: your writing, if you've already done it in your exercise book or on a piece of paper, a pencil, your super imagination and your teddy talk partner.

Pause the video now and go and get whatever items you need and then you can press play when you return.

Before we go any further today, I'd like us to sing our song all about you, Little Duck, and how the King wasn't fair on you.

If you remember it from the other lessons, children, you can join in too! Are we ready? Oh, that's not fair, that's not fair, the King stole my money and that's not fair, that's not fair, that's not fair, he threw me in a hole and that's not fair, that's not fair, that's not fair, the King stole my money and that's not fair, that's not fair, that's not fair, he put me in a pot and that's not fair, that's not fair, that's not fair, the King stole my money and that's not fair, that's not fair, that's not fair, the King stole my money and that's not fair.

Now last verse: this is fair, this is fair, I've got my money and this is fair, this is fair, this is fair, I've got my money and this is fair.

Let's start with our nursery rhyme: Ten Green Bottles.

Now in the last lesson, I asked you to have a go at changing the words in our nursery rhyme.

So I'm going to change the words in our nursery rhyme from ten green bottles sitting on a wall to ten little ducks like the little duck from our story.

Ten little ducks sitting on a wall, ten little ducks sitting on a wall, and if one little duck should fly away now, there'll be nine little ducks sitting on a wall.

I'm going to put you down Little Duck so I can use my hands to show the actions.

Nine little ducks sitting on a wall, nine little ducks sitting on a wall, and if one little duck should fly away now, there'll be eight little, oops that was nine, eight little, that was nine again! Eight little ducks sitting on a wall, eight little ducks sitting on a wall, and if one little duck should fly away now, there'll be, make sure I get it right, seven little ducks, sitting on a wall.

Do you want to have a go with your teddy talk partner to carry on all the way down to one little duck? Okay, so let's read over what we've already written, and then go over our box plan to see what we are writing next.

Okay, we'll start off over here.

Little Duck had some money.

The selfish King got her money.

It was unfair! The problem in our story here is really clear.

The Duck met a rope.

It got in her bag.

Duck met a hammer and it got in her bag.

Duck met some ants and they got in the bag because they were helpful.

You might want to have a read over your writing with your parent or your carer or you might want to read it to your teddy talk partner.

And, remember, yours might look a little bit different to mine, depending on how you changed the characters in your story.

So, if we have a look at my box plan, which is here, I've written up to this point, where she meets the people who solve her problems, the next part of my writing is going to focus on the other unfair problems that the Duck comes across: where she gets put into the hole, where she gets put into the pot, but then, how she solves her problems and how the story becomes fair again.

And, of course, we need to make sure that all of our sentences show five.

Remember, Cedric reminded me of that in the last lesson.

Capital letters, finger spaces, spellings and phonics, full stop and makes sense.

So don't forget to check your sentences for five, once you've written them.

Okay, so, I can see from look at section three of my box plan, that the next problem that the duck faces, is being put in a hole by the King.

Now, if you're feeling confident to get straight on with writing, and you want to write that first sentence, you can pause the video now and have a go.

If you feel like you want to write along with me, then that's okay too.

Okay, so, let me put that into a sentence.

I might say, the King put Duck into a hole, but I might describe the hole using an adjective, a describing word, a deep hole.

Okay, so I'm going to say my sentence now, the Duck, the King, put Duck in a deep hole.

Say it again.

The King put Duck in a deep hole.

Okay, now I'm going to punctuate it.

Capital letter, the King, put, capital letter, Duck, cause that's her name, in a deep hole.

Okay, I'm going to have a go at writing that now.

If you want to write along with me that's fine, or if you want to pause the video after I've written the sentence and you can write it then, that's okay too.

Let's have a look at that being written.

Capital letter, the, taken from my high frequency word box, King, K, I, N, G.

King.

And, I've got a diagraph at the end there, ing.

The King put, P, U, T, put Duck, capital letter, D, U, K, duck, in, a, deep, D, EE, P, deep, the diagraph, e, we're finding the middle of words, hole, H, O, L, hole.

So, rather than finishing my sentence there with a full stop, I want to use a conjunction, but, to extend my sentence.

The King put Duck in a deep hole but, can you shout at the screen who helped her out? That was it! The rope helped her.

But, the rope helped her.

Let's have a look at that being written, but the rope, R, O, P, rope helped her or helped Duck.

Okay, so lets read that sentence altogether, The King put Duck in a deep hole but the rope helped Duck.

Can you make sure you've written your first sentence now.

You might want to change it and make it your own, or you might want to write what I have.

The next part of my story, then, is where the Duck is put into the pot.

What I'd like you all to do, now, is pause the video and have a go at writing the next part of this story.

What was your item that helped Duck get out of the pot? If it was a hammer, did it smash out? If it was a boxer, did it punch the lid off? Have a little think about your character and how it overcame the problem of being stuck in the pot, and have a go at writing those sentences.

You can pause the video now.

Okay, so I used a hammer to help Duck smash out of the pot so I'll show you now how I put that into a sentence.

So, first, the King put Duck in a pot.

The King put Duck in a pot.

Capital letter: The King put Duck in a pot, full stop.

And then, after that, the hammer helped Duck smash out.

I'm going to use smash because I think that's a great action.

The hammer helped Duck smash out.

The hammer helped Duck smash out.

Capital letter: The hammer helped, Capital letter: Duck smash out.

Those two sentences together.

The King put Duck in a pot, the Hammer helped duck smash out.

Let's have a look at that being written.

The, for my high frequency word box, King, which I've already written so I can copy that again, put, P, O, T, which I've already written, Duck in a pot, P, O, T, pot.

And you might describe the pot, a big pot, an enormous pot.

The hammer, H, A, M, long m song, ER.

Hammer.

helped Duck smash, I love this word, S, M, A, SH, smash, its got the diagraph sh at the end, out, out, out, full stop.

You can check over your sentences now and read what you've written.

The King put Duck in a deep hole but the rope helped Duck.

The King put Duck in a pot.

The hammer helped Duck smash out.

What is the next part of our story? What is the next part of our story? Well, this bit for me is where the ants bit the King, and why did they bite the King? Can you tell your teddy talk partner why the ants bit the King.

What's our story all about? That's right, the King being unfair.

So, I'd like us to write that into a sentence.

Now, your character might be ants or it might be something different.

So, you could just change the character.

So, I might say, the ants bit the King because he was unfair, which is one of our star words.

The ants bit the King because he was unfair.

Can you pause the video now and have a go at writing your last sentence? And, then, play it once you've written it.

Well done, if you had a go at writing that, let's have a look at my writing all together, and then you may want to edit yours, or add to it, and you can always pause or rewind the video to do that.

The King put Duck in a deep hole but the rope helped Duck.

The King put Duck in a pot.

The hammer helped Duck smash out.

The ants bit the King because the King or he was unfair.

All great work today, children, we wrote a lot, and you've been so resilient, remember, you can always rewind the video or go back to any point if you need to catch up.

Oh, great work on your writing in this unit, children.

I bet you've all worked really, really hard and you should be super proud of yourself.

Whether you did the same ideas as me, whether you recycled your own ideas, whether you listened to the story really well, whether you did some brilliant speech and thought bubbles, everybody has got something to be proud of in this unit.

I'm so exited now to read all of our story, all together.

You can listen to mine now, but then you might want to pause the video and read yours through altogether with your teddy talk partner or your parent or carer.

Little Duck had some money.

The selfish King got her money.

It was unfair! The Duck met a rope.

It got in her bag.

Duck met a hammer and it got in her bag.

Duck met some ants and they got in the bag because they were helpful.

The King put Duck in a hole, a deep hole, but the rope helped Duck.

The King put Duck in a pot.

The hammer helped Duck smash out.

The ants bit the King because he was unfair.

Fantastic work, children, and thank-you so much for helping me become a story teller, and recycling the story and making it my own.

Now, before we go, I'd like to say bye to Cedric and Little Duck as well.

Hi, you two, oh Little Duck, thank-you so much for being a guest in our unit.

We've really enjoyed having you here and looking at the story all about you.

Have you enjoyed writing our story, Cedric, for this unit? Oh great work, and we've got one more lesson.

But, in that lesson, we're going to be creating our own stories, so that's really exciting, isn't it Cedric? Let's finish on our song! This is fair, this is fair, Little Duck got her money and this is fair, this is fair, this is fair, Little Duck got her money and this is fair.

King ran away.

This is fair, this is fair, the King ran away and this is fair, this is fair, this is fair, the King ran away and this is fair.

Well-done with your writing children, and if you'd like to you can ask your parent or carer to share your work because we would all like to read your recycled stories.