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Hello.

Welcome back to unit 24.

Lesson number four, avoiding run-ons, with me, Mr. Halpin.

Ready to begin? Excellent.

Before we start, please make sure you have a pen, some paper, and your brain is switched to the arm position.

Please pause your video to collect this equipment now.

All set? Wonderful.

This is what today's lesson will look like.

We're going to recap some previously taught ideas, we're going to look at complete capitals, we're going to introduce avoiding run-on sentences, you're going to create some wonderful writing, then you're going to complete your quiz.

Sound good? Awesome.

Let's get to it.

Which of these sentences, capitalises I, correctly? You can pause your video to read the responses or listen to me read them aloud.

Option one, my friends and I watched a movie.

Option number two, my friends and I watched a movie.

The count of three, point your screen, or shout out loud, one, two, three, option two.

Brilliant start, if you've got that right, well done.

Remember, I, must be a capital letter, whenever it is used by itself.

Let's look at this example, last week, I went rock climbing, you can see the I, being used by itself, in this sentence.

To fix it, we must make sure it is a capital.

Great start, well done.

Let's continue looking at capital letters.

You've done some excellent work studying a lot of capital letter rules.

Can you remember them all? On the next slide, I have a passage, with a number of capital letter errors.

Can you proofread it and make sure you find and fix all of those capital letter mistakes? Good luck, pause your video and resume when you are ready.

Whoo! Did you find them all and fix them? Does your work look like this? Incredible, if it does, fantastic, well done.

Moving on now, avoiding run-on sentences, I have a new rule for you.

Whenever you list two things that a subject did in a sentence, you only name the subject once.

You are going to learn about run-on sentences, run-on sentences are incorrect and you should avoid using them.

Here is an example of a run-on sentence, the girls sunbathed and they listened to music.

The subject of the sentence is the girls, but they're also mentioned again in the same sentence, the word they, we've named the subject twice in this sentence, that is a run-on.

To fix it, you must put a full stop, after the first part of the sentence, the girls sunbathed, then a capital letter, for they and then complete the sentence, this is no longer a run-on.

Run-on sentences.

When you list two things a subject did in a sentence, you only name the subject once.

Let's have a look at another example, Mr and Mrs. Jones bought a car.

I just got to put it back to here.

You're going to learn about run-on sentences.

Run on sentences are incorrect, you should avoid using them.

Here's an example of a run-on sentence, the girls sunbathed and they listened to music.

What's the subject of this sentence? The girls, the girls are also mentioned again later in the same sentence, the word they, we've named the subject twice, this is a run-on sentence.

To fix it, we put a full stop to the first part of the sentence, a capital letter for the word they, new subject, new sentence, and off you go.

Remember, when you list two things, a subject did in one sentence, you must only name the subject once.

Let's have a look at another example, Mr and Mrs. Jones bought a new car and they loved it.

The subject of this sentence, Mr and Mrs. Jones, but they are mentioned again, with the word they, so we must put a full stop after new car, capital T on they, they loved it, this is no longer a run-on sentence.

Your turn now, do you think you can avoid using run-on sentences? These sentences are all run-ons.

Can you fix them by making them into two sentences? Pause your video and resume when you are ready, All done? Wonderful.

Does your work look like this? Excellent work, prior you've avoided using run-on sentences.

Amazing.

Which of these is a run-on sentence? You can pause your video, read the options to yourself, or, listen to me read them aloud.

The bird sang and flapped its wings.

The bird sang and it flapped its wings.

The bird sang.

It flapped its wings.

Which of these is a run-on sentence? One, two, three, the bird sang and it flapped its wings.

The bird is the subject of this sentence, but it is also named again with the word, it.

Well done, if you spotted that run-on.

Over to you now, ready to create some fantastic writing? Brilliant, let's go.

Remember, in this unit, you are creating a piece of writing based on a sequence of pictures.

Remember to aim for your writing checks.

Here are the writing checks for this session.

Check number one, I have used capital letters correctly.

Check number two, I've used the word and to write about two things, one subject did.

Check number three, I have written in the past tense.

Remember, your writing needs to be believable and realistic.

One of the ways you can do this, is by telling what you know happened, writing in the past tense.

Here is your first image for this session.

Take a moment to look for who, subject and what, verbs.

Our subject, Samira, and some of the verbs you might've thought about, sat or wrote.

Here is the second image of today's sequence.

Our subject, Samira, what verbs? Posted, perhaps.

And here is the final image for today's writing.

Subject? Jess.

Verbs? Received.

Here is the full sequence, please pause your video, take a moment to plan your writing.

Resume the video when you're ready.

In earlier lessons, I've given you an opening sentence.

Today, you're going to create your own opening sentence, and I have a rule for you.

A good story opening, named the subject, tells us what they did, and where they are.

Give it a go today.

I'd like to pause your video now and write your story.

Resume your video, when you're ready.

All done? We created some fantastic writing? Wonderful.

Let's have a look at mine.

Samira, sat at her desk.

She wrote a letter to her friend Jess.

She wrote the address on the envelope and placed the letter inside.

Samira left her house.

She walked to the postbox and posted her letter.

Jess received the letter and opened it.

She put it on her mantelpiece.

Have I met all of those writing checks? Let's have a look.

Check number one, have I used capital letters correctly? Yes.

Yes I have, did you? Brilliant.

Have I used the word and to write about two things a subject did.

Yes.

Yes I have.

Have you? Wonderful.

And is my writing in the past tense? Let's check my verbs.

Yes, it is.

Is yours? Have you met all three writing checks? Amazing.

That brings us to the end of this session.

Please remember to complete your quiz, and if you would like to share your work with Oak National, please ask your parent or carer to share your work on Instagram, Facebook or Twitter, tagging @OakNational and #LearnwithOak.

Well done on a fantastic effort.

See you next time.