Lesson video

Hi, everyone, my name is Miss Smith.

And welcome to today's lesson.

Today, we will be writing our narrative scene, our first written outcome in this unit, "Rabbit-proof Fence." When you're ready, let's get started.

In today's lesson, we'll begin with a sentence level warmup, where we'll think about compound sentences before we read a model write.

Your task today will be to write a narrative scene using planning from previous lessons.

In this lesson, you'll need something to write on and something to write with, and your brain switched on, ready for learning.

Okay, can you write a compound sentence for this image? And this is an image in this first scene.

Remember, a compound sentence is made from two main clauses, a main clause makes sense on its own.

And they are joined by a coordinating conjunction.

And there are three coordinating conjunctions that you might choose from.

And, but, and or.

So, pause and have a go at writing a compound sentence for this image before I share one of my ideas.

Okay, hopefully you've had a go at your own compound sentence, two main clauses.

My compound sentence is on screen now.

Molly gazed at the cloudless sky and her aunt whispered gently by her side.

First main clause, Molly gazed at the cloudless sky.

Second main clause, her aunt whispered gently by her side.

The coordinating conjunction is and.

Today, we are writing our first scene, our first written outcome for this unit.

And so we've worked hard already on the planning for this scene.

And we thought about vocabulary to describe the setting, it's in that green box.

We wrote non-finite clause complex sentences, like the one at the bottom of the screen.

Beating down from above the lifeless trees, the relentless sun tortured the dry ground.

And we also thought about adverbial phrases and clauses that might help at each point through the scene.

If you haven't got your previous planning with you, you want to pause the video now and go and collect any notes that you've already made.

So, reminder that we are using these five images to support our writing, and all our planning so far has focused on these.

For each image, we're aiming to write two or three sentences.

And so, then all together we'll have written a whole section that will be our narrative for this scene.

So now that we've seen the clip for the final time, let's just think, what do we need to remember in our writing today? What are the things that we have been thinking about throughout our planning in previous lessons? Can you just pause and have a think to yourself now? What is it that we've been planning so carefully? Well, we've thought a lot about how we will describe the setting, the fact that we need to really carefully, and in detail, introduce our main character, and that in the second part of our scene, particularly, we need to make sure we've described character actions to say what our characters are doing and how they're behaving.

So we'll look now at some model writing.

And on screen, we've got all elements of our planning so far, so our notes on setting and our vocabulary, including our green-colored Mrs. Wordsmith word, oppressive.

We have our adverbial clauses and phrases, and our non-finite clause complex sentence for the first image.

And at the bottom of the screen, a model piece of writing, an example of what the first two sentences could look like.

I'll read them to you now.

Beating down from above the lifeless trees, the relentless sun tortured the dry ground.

The never-ending landscape was littered with boulders and burnt bushes concealed the ground.

Can you just look at the model writing alongside those planning parts at the top, and see how I've used the plan to form those sentences at the bottom, where did I get my ideas from? Just pause and have a look now.

Okay, hopefully you've had a good opportunity to go through that.

I'm going to talk you through how it is I've used my planning notes to form these sentences.

Well, the great thing about planning a non-finite clause complex sentence for each image is that we can just use that straight away.

So, "Beating down from above the lifeless trees, "the relentless sun tortured the dry ground" is a complete sentence that I had in my notes.

So I put that as my very first sentence.

And then you'll see the word, never-ending, an adjective in my setting box to describe the landscape.

And I made sure that I included that, so that I had an ambitious adjective.

Let's look now at a piece from later on in the scene, where we might introduce our character.

So we've got those same elements of planning, a character box with ideas in.

Some full sentence level ideas and our adverbial phrases and clauses.

Beneath the trees and in the dappled shade, the young girl was deep in thought.

Molly followed the spirit-bird as it drifted through the sky and her aunt whispered softly by her side.

Can you just have a look at the planning alongside the model writing, and see how I've used that plan to create the writing at the bottom of this page? Hopefully you've had a good time to do that.

Let's see together.

Beneath the trees was one of my adverbial openers, and I've used it at the very beginning of that first sentence.

Listening closely to her aunt, Molly followed the spirit-bird as it drifted through the sky.

And another sentence, Molly gazed at the cloudless sky and her aunt whispered gently by her side.

Well, I used a combination of ideas from those two sentences to form my second sentence.

Molly followed the spirit-bird as it drifted through the sky.

And her aunt whispered softly by her side.

And formed a compound sentence using an idea from each of those parts of my planning.

So your task today is to write a narrative scene.

And remember to aim for two or three sentences for each image that you've planned.

Certainly have your planning next to you as you're writing and use it to help you with your ideas, and a reminder of what different parts of the planning look like.

You should pause your video now to complete your task and to write the narrative scene.

And each image is on the screen now as a reminder.

Congratulations, that's the end of today's lesson.

So we've completed some sentence level work at the beginning before reading and analysing model text, which has hopefully supported you in writing your narrative scene, which was the first in this unit.

Well done, that's the end of today's lesson.

And you should feel really proud of all your hard work and all of the writing that you've done today.

Hope you really enjoyed the lesson, and have a great day.