Lesson video

Hi, everyone.

Welcome to your ninth lesson of the unit, and final day of writing with me, Miss Brittain and Cedric.

In this lesson, we're going to write the final part of our recycled story, focusing on the middles that build drama and make our readers excited to read on.

In this lesson, we'll start with our nursery rhyme.

Then we'll have a story recap to read what we've already written and see where we're up to, and then we'll finish off our recycled story.

For this lesson, you will need any writing that you've already done, and an exercise book, or a piece of paper and a pencil, super memory and imagination, and your teddy talk partner.

You can pause the video now to go and get whatever items you need and then press play once you get back.

We'll start off with our nursery rhyme, and this is the last day that we're going to sing our own version of "Twinkle, Twinkle, Little Star." So with our nursery rhyme, we've been singing ♪ Little Red Fish ♪ ♪ Feeling scared in the sea ♪ I thought we could flip it today, Cedric, for the last day, and sing it about the big, bad shark.

What do you think? Okay, so we'll sing, ♪ Big, bad scary shark ♪ ♪ Hunting Little Red fish ♪ Can you join in with that, children? ♪ Big, bad scary shark ♪ ♪ Hunting Little Red fish ♪ ♪ Will he catch him ♪ ♪ I hope not ♪ ♪ Will he eat him ♪ ♪ I don't know ♪ ♪ Big, bad scary shark ♪ ♪ Hunting Little Red fish ♪ You can carry on practising that one if you'd like to with your teddy talk partner.

Now it's time to recap our story map to see where we're up to, and then we can write the final bit of our recycled story.

Okay, so having a look on our story map, we wrote the section about Little Red fish and going into the ocean to go to his grandma's house.

Last lesson we wrote that he met the big, bad shark.

Now the final section of our story is where he gets to Granny's cave.

Oh, and what happens there? He gets to Granny's cave, and he.

Little Red fish gets eaten.

But we've got to make sure we use that I wonder phrase still to make our audience wants to read to the very end.

Let's have a go at writing our final bit of our story.

Now it's time to write our recycled story.

Let's have a look at what we wrote in the last lesson.

Little Red swam in the dark ocean.

I wonder if he will be safe.

Little Red met a big, scary shark.

He had sharp teeth.

I hope he will get away.

And we've really used that wonder and hope.

Have a go at reading your writing to your teddy talk partner now, children.

Let's look at today's star words.

We've got Granny's, 'cause Little Fish is going to Granny's cave, wonder, 'cause we want to make our audience wonder, and scary, again, for our scary shark.

Granny's, wonder, and scary.

Can you say them with me? Granny's, wonder, scary.

Great work, everybody.

Let's have a look at our high frequency words.

We've got to, I, if, he, and the.

Let's have a look at those together.

My turn, to.

Your turn.

My turn, I.

Your turn.

My turn, if.

Your turn.

My turn, he.

Your turn.

My turn, the.

Your turn.

Great work, everybody.

We can't sound them out, we've just got to know them.

And then of course, show me five, which we should be familiar with now from our other writing lessons.

You can pause the video now and go through the five with your teddy talk partner if you'd like to.

Okay, so the next part of our writing is where the big, bad shark swims to Granny's cave and gets there before Little Red.

So I need to put that into a sentence.

If you're feeling confident enough, pause the video now and write your own sentence using some of our star words and our high frequency words.

You can pause the video now if you'd like to have a go.

If you want to carry on and write along with me, that's okay too.

So I need to put that into a sentence.

Remember whenever I write a sentence, I need to think it, say it twice, and then punctuate it before I write it.

So the shark swam to Granny's cave.

The shark swam to Granny's cave.

I wonder if we could describe the shark, and think of two describing words, two adjectives to describe the shark.

Can you tell your teddy talk partner two adjectives that you would use to describe the shark? And it might be one of our star words.

Oh, great ideas, everyone, and good job if you gave that go.

Doesn't matter if you only thought of one.

I liked scary from our star word.

I liked evil, I liked big, 'cause we want to make our shark seem quite sinister, and we want our audience to be scared of him.

I think I want to use big again, and I think I'm going to use scary.

About his size, and how he makes you feel.

So the big, scary shark swam to Granny's cave.

Let's say it again.

The big scary shark swam to Granny's cave.

Okay, now I'm going to punctuate it.

Capital letter the, big scary shark swam to Granny's, oh, capital letter, Granny's cave, because she's called Granny, that's her name.

And I've got scary, and I've got Granny in my style words and some of my high frequency words there to write it.

If you want to write that sentence now, pause the video if you want to have a go on your own.

Okay.

Let's have a look at that being written.

And remember for any words that I can't spell, I need to use my phonics to sound them out.

I say the word, robot the word, blend the word, then write the word.

Let's have a look at that being written.

Capital letter the, big, big, big.

Scary, which is one of my star words, and you might put something else in there, you might have liked your adjective more and that's okay, too.

Shark, shark, shark.

I've got two digraphs, sh and ah.

Two letters, one sound.

The big scary shark swam, swam, swam, to, my high frequency word, Granny's, which is one of my star words, cave, and you draw phonics to sound out cave Cave, cave.

The big scary shark swam to Granny's cave.

Now like all of our other work that we've done earlier in the unit, we've always left it on an I wonder.

And I think to make our audience excited and leave them on a cliffhanger, we call it cliffhangers when you don't know what's.

you want to know what's going to happen.

I think we should leave our audience with an I wonder statement to make them excited, to make them nervous.

What's happened to Little Red? What might the audience wonder that the big, bad, scary shark is going to do to Little Red? What might we think is going to happen? Can you tell your screen? Brilliant ideas! They might think that he's going to eat him up.

So why don't we put that into a sentence? I wonder if he will eat Little Red.

I wonder if he will eat Little Red.

If you want to put something different, your own wonder sentence, that's great, too.

You might want to pause the video now and write the one that I just said.

I wonder if he will eat Little Red.

You can pause the video now and have a go.

If you want to write along with me, that's okay, too.

Let's have a look at that being written.

Oh, I forgot to punctuate it.

Capital letter I, wonder if he will eat, capital letter Little, capital letter Red, because Little Red is his name.

Full stop.

Let's have a look at that being written.

I wonder, one of my star words, if, one of my high frequency words, he will, we got a long ooh sound in will, eat, eat, eat, you can have a go at sounding that one out, Little Red.

You should have already written Little Red earlier on in our writing.

So you can copy that.

Full stop.

Let's have a look at that all together.

The big, scary shark swam to Granny's cave.

I wonder if he will eat Little Red.

That is brilliant.

Great work if you managed to give the writing a go.

You might feel like you want to carry on the story to the end, and that's great too, but if you feel like you want to stop there and leave your audience guessing, then that is great.

Well done, everyone.

Wow everybody! Great work if you gave writing a go today.

I am so proud of all of you, and I'd love to see what we've written all together.

Let's have a look.

Little Red swam in the dark ocean.

I wonder if he will be safe.

Little Red met a big, scary shark.

He had sharp teeth.

I hope he will get away.

The big, scary shark swam to Granny's cave.

I wonder if he will eat Little Red.

And I love that we ended our story on an I wonder 'cause it leaves your audience guessing and wanting to read more.

Oh, I'm so proud of you all, children.

You might want to pause the video now and have a go at reading your writing back.

And if you need to, you can pause the video and rewind it at any time to catch up.

Great work, everyone, well done.

Well done on writing your recycled stories, everybody.

Me and Cedric are so proud of you all.

Let's give ourselves a wild Western cheer.

You ready? Yee-haw! Oh, well done everyone.

We can't wait for the next lesson because we're becoming story creators.

I'm excited, are you, Cedric? See you in the next lesson, children!.