the process of improving writing to improve text flow and overall quality

a set of standardised symbols and marks used in written language to structure sentences

the way words are arranged within a sentence to convey meaning

the use of specific words and phrases to convey a meaning

Editing a narrative based on 'The Man on the Moon'

English

Developing initial responses to 'The Man on the Moon'

Summarising and sequencing the story of 'The Man on the Moon'

Generating ambitious vocabulary for narrative writing

Planning the opening of a narrative based on 'The Man on the Moon'

Writing the opening of a narrative based on 'The Man on the Moon'

Planning the build-up of a narrative based on 'The Man on the Moon'

Writing the build-up of a narrative based on 'The Man on the Moon'

Planning the climax of a narrative based on 'The Man on the Moon'

Writing the climax of a narrative based on 'The Man on the Moon'

Planning the resolution of a narrative based on 'The Man on the Moon'

Writing the resolution of a narrative based on 'The Man on the Moon'

In this unit, pupils learned how to use a range of fronted adverbials. In the next unit, pupils will learn how to use a wider range of sentence starters.

In 'The BFG', pupils learnt to use complex sentences for setting and character descriptions. In this unit, pupils learn how to use vocabulary in a wider range of sentence structures with increasing precision to show characterisation.

In this unit, pupils write their own version of the short film 'The Man on the Moon'. The unit encourages pupils to build on their understanding of the narrative structure of opening, build-up, climax and resolution. Each section is written with a focus on using certain sentence types.

'The Man on the Moon': narrative writing

making improvements to sentence structure

the way words are arranged and organised within sentences

a set of symbols and marks used to structure sentences

Which sentence is accurately punctuated with capital letters?

Which conjunction should join these two clauses together? 'Lily was determined to send her letter to the moon, __________ nothing was working.' 

Check that language choices are ambitious to engage the reader.

Use a mix of sentence types to ensure our writing flows for the reader.

What should we do when editing sentence structure?

Check the language matches the text type.

What should we do when making improvements to language choices?

the young girl looked through her telescope

the young girl looked through her telescope.

The young girl looked through her telescope

The young girl looked through her telescope.

'The excited, determined girl' is an example of which of these?

As the girl looked through her telescope her eyes widened in surprise. 

As the girl looked through her telescope, her eyes widened in surprise. 

As, the girl looked through her telescope her eyes widened in surprise. 

As the girl looked through her telescope her eyes widened, in surprise. 

A {{}} sentence is formed of two main clauses joined with a co-ordinating conjunction. 

This lesson was made for home learning during the pandemic.

Editing a narrative based on 'The Man on the Moon'

Lesson outcome

This lesson was made for home learning during the pandemic.