Lesson video

Hi everybody and welcome to our lesson today.

In our last writing lesson, we've began to explore punctuating speech.

Today, we are going to build on that knowledge and go a little bit deeper with punctuating speech sentences.

Our learning objective today is to develop our understanding of punctuated speech.

This is Lesson eight of 10 and is our second writing outcome for Sherlock Holmes.

In this lesson, you will need an exercise book or lined paper, a pen or pencil, and your very best learning brain.

Make sure to pause the video now if you need to go and get any of those things.

Today's learning agenda.

Firstly, we are going to explore some synonyms for said.

Then we are going to revisit our rules for writing speech.

And then we are going to practise writing some speech sentences which we can add to our character description.

So for our writing warmup, we are going to be exploring some synonyms for said.

Can you think of any synonyms for said as synonym is a word with the same or similar meaning? So on your page, write the word said in the centre of a mind map, and can we list as many words as you can think of for the word said? Set yourself a timer and try to do as many as you can in 30 seconds.

Pause the video while you do that.

Okay, everyone, 30 seconds is up.

Let's see if you got any of the same as I did.

So I got the words exclaimed or reassured.

Here are some more.

Whispered, snapped, muttered, reassured, murmured, complained, exclaimed.

Here are just a few examples of synonyms for said.

Maybe you came up with a few different ones to me.

If there are any on the screen that you would like to , add them to your mind map now and pause the video while you do that.

Okay.

So everyone, now we are going to recap the rules for writing speech first sentences.

Speech first is what we covered in our last writing lesson.

What punctuation can you see? First, let's read the sentence together.

"It's been weeks since our last case," muttered the agitated detective.

Pause the video now while you point at and say the name of all the punctuation you can see.

Okay, everyone, let's go through this together.

So we begin by opening our inverted commas.

Up next we've got to have a capital letter, well done if you spotted it.

Then we've got our whole speech sentence.

So what Sherlock said, "It's been weeks since our last case." We've got to finish that sentence with a comma before we close our inverted commas.

Now, this is where we, as the author, or the new resource step in.

So Sherlock has said his sentence, and now it's our turn as the author to choose synonym for said.

So muttered the agitated detective.

We finished with a full stop.

So, in our last lesson, we discussed how our vocab choices could make our speech sentences more precise.

This is my example sentence from our last lesson.

"Calm down, Sherlock," urged John Watson gently as he surveyed the detective from an armchair.

So I improved and made the sentence more precise by choosing a precise verb, a synonym for said, urged.

I then added in some adverbial detail to explain how John Watson spoke.

I used the word gently.

And finally I added an 'as' subordinate clause to my sentence, as he surveyed the detective from an armchair.

Now, at the end of our last lesson, you added a really high level speech first sentence to your character description.

Now, we're going to develop our understanding of how we can punctuate speech second in a sentence.

So I've taken the exact same sentence that we just looked at.

But this time I rearrange my sentence so the speech comes second and then the narrator speaks first.

Let's read it through together to start with.

The agitated detective muttered, "It's been weeks since our last case." Now, pause the video, point to all the punctuation that you can see and try to name it all.

Off you go.

Okay, everyone, hopefully you all paused the video and you had a go at pointing to and naming all the speech punctuation you can see.

Let's do it together now.

So, the agitated detective muttered, now I've got to have my comma before I open my inverted commas.

Then I open my inverted commas, now everything inside the inverted commas is what my character said.

I've got to remember my capital letter.

I've used a full stop for the end of that speech sentence, and then I close my inverted commas.

So let's just pause and have a look at that.

We use a comma, then we open the inverted commas.

Our speech sentence begins with a capital letter, then we have the whole speech sentence, and Sherlock's sentence ends in a full stop, and that all goes inside the inverted commas.

So I do my full stop first, and then I use my closing inverted commas.

So just like in our last lesson, I've made us a speech scaffold.

This time, our speech scaffold is for speech second sentences.

So this is going to be really helpful for you to use in the following task.

So remember we begin the narrative sentence with a capital letter and whoever his name it is, they need capital letters with their name, then we use those as well.

We use our synonym for said, a comma before we open the inverted commas, our speech second sentences begin with a capital letter and they end in a full stop, but that could be an exclamation mark or question mark or ellipsis.

if it's appropriate.

And then we close our inverted commas at the end.

So now we're going to have a go at punctuating some speech second sentences.

Your task is to punctuate this sentence correctly.

Use that speech scaffold in the bottom corner to help you.

Pause the video while you do that.

Okay, everybody, hopefully we've all paused this video and we've had a go at writing this whole sentence using our speech punctuation and using that scaffold to help you.

Let's have a look at the correct punctuation now.

So to begin, we've got to use a capital letter for John and Watson because this is a proper name.

He needs a capital letter for his first and his surname.

Next, we need a comma to introduce the speech.

So John Watson murmured comma.

Up next, we've got our opening inverted commas, and at the start of a speech sentence, we've got to use a capital letter.

Then this is John Watson's full sentence.

"I am sure that another mystery will appear soon." We've got to use a full stop to finish the sentence.

And to close that speech, we've got to use our closing inverted commas.

Now, have a quick look through your sentence that you've written down and give yourself a little mini tick for every single one of the punctuation areas that you got correct.

Now we are going to practise writing speech second sentences.

Now, what might Sherlock Holmes and John Watson have said to each other? Have some thinking time.

Here are a few examples of what I think they might have said.

So Sherlock might have said, "There's got to be another case out there.

." and I finished the sentence with ellipsis.

, so he's like trailing off because his thoughts are still unfinished, deep in thought.

Now, John Watson might have replied, "Relax, Sherlock.

"Another case will come along any day now." Now I've added a couple of more examples, something else that Sherlock and John might have said to each other in the office.

"I've had enough of waiting.

"I need another case NOW." I use now in capital letters to show that he's shouting at, he's feeling so frustrated to which John Watson might respond, "Have a little patience, dear friend.

"It's only been a couple of weeks since our last case!" Now, here are examples of things that I think the characters might have said to each other.

However, I would really like you to have a little bit more thinking time.

And perhaps you can come up with another sentence that Sherlock may have said and another sentence that John Watson may have said in response.

Pause the video now while you have a little thinking.

Okay, everyone, hopefully we've all had a bit of thinking.

Perhaps we've come up with a few more ideas for sentences that the characters might have said to each other in that office.

Okay, everyone.

So we've just had a really good thinking and a really great discussion about sentences that John Watson and Sherlock Holmes might have said to each other.

So I want you to use the speech scaffold that we've got on the screen.

And when you have thought of something that Sherlock might have said, or something that John Watson might have said, I would like you to use that scaffold to punctuate the sentence correctly.

We might be using verbs such as replied or responded if we've got the characters talking to each other.

If you decide that the characters are going to speak to each other, we must make sure that we take a new line when we have a new speaker.

Remember we are not going to write five or six or seven speech sentences because that can get quite boring for our reader.

It's far better to choose one or two really high level ambitious speech sentences, which really push the action on and help our reader understand a little bit more about the characters.

Then writing a whole big stream of conversation between the two characters.

Now, you already wrote a speech first sentence in our last lesson.

Perhaps you only write one more speech sentence.

But this time I would like you to try using a speech second sentence.

Use your scaffold to help you.

And when you're feeling confident, you can write the sentence and add it to your character description.

And when you're finished, you can click Play on this video.

Okay, everybody, that brings us to the end of our lesson.

So we have worked so hard over the past few lessons.

You wrote an incredible character description.

Then you wrote some amazing high level speech first sentences in our last lesson.

And today you've got even deeper with your understanding of speech, and you've written some speech second sentences, and you've added those to the character description.

So you have brought the character description to life using these speech first and speak second sentences, which are really going to help our reader understand more about the characters and how they are feeling.

You should be feeling so proud of yourself right now.