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Hi, I'm Mrs. Howley, this is Cedric.

And this is Lesson 10 of this unit.

And we are going to finish our fantastic created stories.

How exciting? In this lesson, we're going to write the end of our created stories showing mood.

We're going to start with some spelling.

Then we're going to do some shared writing, and then you're going to do some independent writing.

You'll need an exercise book and some paper, a pencil or a pen, and your brilliant, imaginative, fantastic, amazing brains.

Pause the video now if you need to collect those things, and then press play when you're ready.

We're so thrilled to be writing the rest of our stories today, that we're going to sing our Garden Party song one more time to get us warmed up, but we might add a different creature this time, let's see.

Okay, join in.

♪ Whose coming to our Garden Party ♪ ♪ Whose coming to our Garden Party ♪ ♪ Whose coming to our Garden Party ♪ ♪ Whose coming to our Garden Party ♪ ♪ Okay, who can come, let's see ♪ ♪ Lion, okay, Lion's coming, roar ♪ ♪ Lion's coming roar ♪ ♪ Lion's coming roar, roar, roar ♪ ♪ He's coming to the Garden Party ♪ ♪ Who else is going to come ♪ ♪ Monkey, okay, Monkey's coming, ooh-ooh-ooh ♪ ♪ Monkey's coming ooh-ooh-ooh, ♪ ♪ Monkey's coming ooh-ooh-ooh, ♪ ♪ She's coming to the Garden Party.

♪ And that works out perfectly, because I'm writing the part in the story today where there is the celebration, the party, and the mood of joy.

Which part of your story are you writing today? What mood are you going to show? When you're writing today, you might need to use some plurals.

Let's have another look at our spellings for this week.

Trees, we've just added S.

Dogs, we've just added S.

Boxes, we've added -es.

Lunches, apples, clouds.

What I'd like you to try today is having a look at each word, saying it in a sentence so you know what it means.

Then write the word without peaking.

And then check the spelling.

Have a try of that now with each of those words.

Pause the video, then press play when you're ready.

We are ready to write the final part of our story.

For each sentence idea that I've got, I'm going to think it, say it, punctuate it.

And then when I write it, I'm going to think it, write it, read it back.

Think it, say it, punctuate it, think it, write it, read it back.

Remember, when we're working we're going to keep using those skills from our Writer's Toolkit to create mood.

To get the reader to feel what we want them to feel.

I'm on to the final box of my story.

The moment of joy and celebration.

Now, I'm going to use my Writer's Toolkit.

So I could describe setting, I could describe character's action, yes.

I'm going to do action for this one.

And I'm going to describe how the snail has changed.

So I'm going to do snail stretched out of his shell and he had the biggest grin.

Snail stretched out of his shell and he had the biggest grin.

Capital letter, Snail stretched out of his shell, and he had the biggest grin, full stop.

So, capital S, Snail, finger space.

Snail stretched, -ed on the end from a past tense verb.

Snail stretched out of his shell.

Snail stretched out of his shell and he had the biggest grin, full stop.

In that sentence I included description of action and description of appearance, 'cause I also talked about the big grin on Snail's face.

Why don't you try now writing the next part of your story, one sentence, or two sentences to show the character's action or appearance, but to create the mood, that you'd written down on your boxing up.

Pause the video now, and have a go.

Press play when you're ready.

Now I want to describe the setting, but still showing that mood of celebration and joy.

So I'm going to start with the simple sentence to say capital letter, the garden was his home.

Full stop.

But then I want to really describe the weather, and just show that it's a really happy day.

So I'm thinking, there was a warm breeze, and the hot sun beamed down, the hot sun, showed its face.

There was a warm breeze and the hot sun showed its face.

Capital letter, there was a warm breeze and the hot sun showed its face.

Full stop.

I'm going to add another sentence to the start of this.

To say, The garden was, that's one of our tricky words.

Was, W-A-S, was his home.

Just to show the reader, how happy he is now.

Then I've got my set in description.

So I've got, there.

Capital T for there.

There was, There was, W-A-S, There was a warm breeze.

There was a warm breeze, and, using that conjunction to draw my ideas.

There was a warm breeze, and the hot sun showed, show -ed for my past tense verb, showed its face, full stop.

Why don't you have a go now at writing a sentence or two to describe the setting, maybe the weather in your story to show the mood? Pause the video now and have a go.

Okay, so now at the party I want to describe, what do you think I could describe now? Action, great idea.

Thinking back to my sensory work earlier in the unit, what might I see people doing or hear? Everyone was laughing and singing.

Capital letter, everyone was laughing and singing, full stop, and for another sentence, what was Snail doing? Snail danced with his friends.

Because then it shows that kindness.

Snail danced with his friends in the garden.

Capital letter, Snail danced with his friends in the garden.

Full stop.

I'm going to add a sentence now.

It was time for, it was time for the party, for the, one of our tricky words.

We can't sound it out we've just got to know it, party with our E on the end.

That sentence just shows us exactly what's going on and what we're describing.

It was time for the party.

Right, now we're ready for our set inscription.

Capital E, Every one was, was, W-A-S, laughing.

Everyone was laughing and, what else where they doing? Everyone was laughing and singing, full stop.

Everyone was laughing and singing, full stop.

Capital S, Snail, Snail, danced.

Snail danced with his friends in the garden.

Snail danced with his friends in the garden, full stop.

Right, it's time for you to finish your created stories.

So, if you haven't described action yet, or you haven't described setting, try and include those things now.

Don't forget your capital letters, finger spaces, full stops, go for it.

Pause the video now, finish off your stories and press play when you're done.

You've done it.

You've written a story, showing moods.

The most exciting bit now is to read your work back.

Read it out loud to someone, to a teddy, to someone at home, and I bet they'll be able to feel all those different moods.

Come on, let's do a British weather cheer.

Are you ready, it's a big one.

Brilliant! Myself and Cedric would love to see some of your completed stories, or even some extracts from them, or your favourite sentence.

If you'd like to share some of your work, ask a parent or a carer to do this for you.

I hope we see you again soon, bye.