Lesson video

Hi, everyone.

My name is Ms. Smith, and welcome to today's lesson.

Today, we'll do some final planning for our first written outcome in this unit, Rabbit Proof Fence.

So when you're ready, let's get started.

In today's lesson, we will begin by correcting a sentence.

So looking for mistakes and fixing them before we do some final planning together and plan for writing this first narrative outcome.

So today you'll need an exercise book or some paper to write on, a pencil or a pen to write with, and your brain switched on to make sure that you get the most out of our final planning lesson today.

Okay, so let's start with a spot the mistakes activity.

I'm going to read the sentence on screen for you now.

It reads, from above the lifeless trees the scorching sun tortured the parched grownd.

And we've got one of our images from the scene on screen there.

Can you just have a read through and spot as many mistakes as possible? Pause and do that now.

Okay, hope you've had a really good look.

I'm going to put three little clues, things to look for, just in case you haven't spotted everything quite yet.

You might just double check you've found all the mistakes that I hinted at in my three clues on screen.

So comma rule, can you name it? Did you spot any capital letters that needed correcting? Any spelling that needed a fix? Okay.

So have a look through now and correct those things together.

Thinking first of all about comma rules, there's a comma missing from this sentence.

Did you spot where it needed to go? That's right, it needs to go after the word trees.

And the important thing is knowing why it goes there.

From above the lifeless trees, the scorching sun tortured the parched ground.

We can see our main clause is second in this sentence, the scorching sun tortured the parched ground.

And that comma comes at the end of our adverbial at the beginning.

From above the lifeless trees, tells us where the sun is.

The second thing, capital letters.

I missed a capital letter at the very beginning.

It needed a capital F.

Hopefully you corrected that for me too.

And finally, a spelling error.

I had the wrong, ou sound in ground.

Not O-W but O-U.

So hopefully you fixed those mistakes too.

Good job.

So let's begin our planning together section reminding ourselves the order of this scene.

So, we've got the view from above of the outback, followed by the view across the vast expanse, then we meet our character, Molly who's looking up at the spirit-bird with her aunt by her side.

So our planning so far includes vocabulary related to the setting in characters depending on the image that we're looking at and some really ambitious vocabulary for all of those images.

And we've also had to think about non-finite clause complex sentence for each image.

And that is so helpful to have a complete sentence written to support your writing at each stage in this scene.

Today, we're going to plan adverbial phrases and clauses our final addition, to the planning for this scene.

What is the difference between a phrase and a clause? But a clause contains a verb.

That's our main difference.

An adverbial phrase or clause helps us to understand when, where, or how an action occurs.

And we are planning adverbial phrases and clauses today.

And it's an important distinction to remind ourselves of that clauses contain verbs, but that both phrases and clauses when adverbial, help us understand when, where, or how an action occurs.

So here's a sentence as an example.

It reads, early in the morning the scorching sun rose above the vast outback.

Can you identify the adverbial phrase or clause in the sentence? And importantly, does it help us to understand when where, or how the action is occurring? Well, there it is early in the morning.

It's a phrase, and it helps us to understand when.

When the scorching sun rose above the outback.

So let's just have a go at sorting some adverbials now.

We've got three boxes on screen, one for when, where, and one for how.

Below the boxes are the adverbials to sort.

They go, before hunting, beneath the trees, scattered across the landscape, in awe of the spirit-bird, with appreciation, and early.

Can you pause your video now and sort those adverbials into the correct box? Okay, hopefully you've had a good chance to do that.

Let's have a look, shall we? And see where each adverbial should be placed.

In the when box, we've got before hunting and early.

In the where box, beneath the trees, and scattered across the landscape.

And in the how box, in awe of the spirit-bird and with appreciation.

One of these is a clause.

Can you identify the adverbial clause on the screen? That's it, it's scattered across the landscape.

And it's a clause because it contains a verb, and the verb is scattered.

So can we add an adverbial phrase or clause to our planning? To the content that we've already been working hard on our vocabulary and our non-finite clause complex sentences.

Can we have a think of an adverbial phrase for this image.

Pause and see if you can add a phrase or a clause to your planning ideas now.

Okay, hopefully you've had a think.

You might even have had something from our activity just then that you might be able to use for this particular image.

My ideas, from above, a phrase and across the vacant landscape, another phrase, vacant meaning empty.

So your task today, is to add an adverbial phrase or clause to each section of your plan.

Remember a phrase does not contain a verb.

So you can add either phrase or clause.

Just a reminder that your phrases will be the ones without verbs.

You might even use a different colour to add this content to your plan so that you can tell which bits is the new parts today.

And the images that take us through our scene are on screen at the bottom as a reminder.

So pause the video now to complete your task and plan an adverbial phrase or clause for each image.

As always, after you've had your go at planning, I'll share my ideas and you can always steal things that you would like to and add to your own planning.

So for image one, my adverbial clauses and phrases.

Well, I had an adverbial opener early, and high above the withered landscape.

So two adverbials for image one.

Image two, we planned together and so we jump to image three.

We have Molly looking up at the sky.

With calm eyes and a dreamy expression, an adverbial telling us how she's doing the looking.

And in the shade of the trees, where she is.

For image four and the spirit-bird, through the cloudless sky and with ease.

A where, and a how adverbial.

And finally with her arm by her side and beneath the trees for image five.

Congratulations, that's the end of this lesson today.

We've done some correcting a sentence, looking for mistakes in a sentence, and you did a great job correcting my first sentence.

We planned together before you planned adverbial clauses and phrases to support your writing of this scene.

Well done for completing today's lesson.

You should feel really proud of your hard work and the preparation that you've put into your planning for writing.