Lesson video

Hi everybody, and welcome to our lesson today.

We have done such an amazing job so far in this writing outcome.

We've already written our opening and today we're going to be planning the main body of our letter.

Today's learning objective is to plan the main body of our letter.

This is lesson number nine of 15, and it's our second writing outcome.

In this lesson, you will need your exercise book or paper, your pen, or pencil, and your best learning brain.

Pause the video if you need a moment to go and get anything.

So today's agenda firstly, we're going to reread our opening paragraph from our last writing lesson, then we are going to plan the housing section of our main body, and then we're going to plan the jobs section of our main body.

So let's begin by rereading our opening paragraph.

I'm going to read it first and then you're going to pause the video so that you can have a moment to read your opening paragraph from our last lesson.

Dear Ben, I'm sorry it's taken me so long to write.

The past few weeks in England have been an adventure, but not exactly a good one.

The journey on the Windrush was crumped and uncomfortable because 493 passengers were crammed onto the ship.

Lord Kitchener, who's one of my favourite singers was on board though during the journey which lasted 30 days, many of us passed the time by singing songs and sharing stories about what we hoped the motherland would be like.

Finally, we arrived at the Tilbury Docks just outside London.

When we arrived, there were lots of reporter shouting and taking photographs.

Onboard the ship, people were feeling very merry and excited to arrive in the motherland.

However, there was no accommodation for us.

Many of us spent our first few nights in England sleeping in an area shelter.

I'm disheartened to write that life in England is not what I expected.

I feel so homesick.

Oh, I can see a little mistake here on my screen.

Onboard the ship, that is success criteria number three, because it's a fronted adverbial of place.

I feel homesick! is actually success criteria number two, it's describing emotions.

So I would like you to pause the video while you reread your opening paragraph from our last lesson off you go.

Okay, everyone well done.

So we should now have re-read our opening paragraph, so we've sort of reminded ourselves of what stage we are at in our writing.

Now we are planning the main body and we're going to separate it into two sections.

Part one is going to be describing the challenges in finding somewhere to live and then part two is going to be describing the challenges in finding a job.

So many of the migrants went from owning their own houses in Jamaica to only being able to afford to rent one room of a crowded house on the outskirts of London.

outskirts means the outside of London.

So lots of people may have felt quite disappointed with that situation.

They went from owning a large family house in Jamaica to suddenly only being able to rent a single room perhaps in a room in a house with lots of other people who are also renting rooms in that house.

So it could have been very overcrowded and very busy and perhaps not a very nice living situation to be in.

So I would like you to lay your page out the way you can see it on the screen.

You can split your page into the following headings experiences, finding a place to live, and emotions and down the left hand side you can write those prompts questions.

So what has been your experience of finding a place to live? And how have you been treated by landlords? Pause the video while you do that and I'll see you when you're ready.

Okay, everyone, so we should all have our table ready and laid out ready for our planning, with our prompt questions written in.

No, I would like you to think back to when we developed our knowledge a little bit further about the challenges faced by the Windrush generation, when they came over to live in Britain.

Where did they sleep at the start of their time in Britain? Can you remember? And then when they did move to their own homes, was the housing situation what they had expected? I'd like you to try and think back to what you know and maybe bullet point in that finding a place to live column, what you can remember about the Windrush generations experiences of finding a place to live and pause the video while you do that.

Okay everybody, so hopefully we have all paused the video and we've added some ideas to our plan.

You might even have started to write down your emotions and how you feel in this situation.

Now, if you're struggling to remember what the challenges were for those people when they try to find accommodation or somewhere to live, here's my plan.

So if you can remember we talked about how a lot of people who travelled over in the Windrush spent their first few nights in an unused air raid shelter in Clapham Common.

So it would have been very dark, and stuffy and uncomfortable, quite similar actually to high uncomfortable that the whole journey on the Windrush ship had been.

Then I remember we're writing from Sonya's point of view so I'm writing in first person.

So, "Back home in Jamaica I owned my own house "now I'm renting a dilapidated room." "I share a kitchen with eight other Jamaicans." So that were dilapidated was from our sherlock holmes unit if you can remember back to that one.

So meaning shabby, not in good condition.

And so," I had a big house in Jamaica "and now I can only afford," or, "I can only find a room in a house to live in.

"And it's really crowded cause I'm sharing it "with eight Other Jamaican people "who are also in the same situation.

"And however, there is a little bit of hope "because I'm hoping to set up a saving partner scheme." Can you remember what the partner scheme was? Think back to our previous lesson? The partners scheme, of course well done, If we can think back the image of money we used with that definition.

So it was when people would grip together and collectively save up for a house.

So a lot of the people who had moved over wouldn't have been able to afford to buy their own home because remember they only really got low paid jobs those were the only ones that were available to them.

So they grouped together and they decided to pull their money, so they would put all of their savings into the one savings pot and buy a house that way.

So if you would like to spend a few moments any of those ideas you can, and then we're going to talk about our emotions.

So pause the video while you add any extra details.

Okay everyone, so not all of us should have a plan, which has a few bullet points in our finding a place to live section.

Now that we know, and we've remembered some of those key facts I would like you to spend the next few minutes jotting down some emotions.

How do you feel? I want you to put yourself into Sonya's put perspective into her shoes and explain what emotions you are feeling, pause the video while you do that.

Okay well done everyone, here are some of my ideas.

So deflated one of our Mrs. Wordsmith was feeling quite disappointed and letdown.

Wistful, so a synonym for wistful would be nostalgic or maybe a bit homesick in this context.

So, "am missing my beautiful home in Kingston, "which is the capital city of Jamaica.

"I'm worried about what the future holds "what if I can never find a permanent home in England?" Okay, now pause the video to add any ideas from my plan into your plan.

Make sure that my ideas are only used to enhance or add to the wonderful ideas you've already got on your plan, because remember this is your letter.

I want it to sound like your writing, not mine.

Okay everybody well done, hopefully we've all paused the video we've any words or phrases we would like to use.

Okay, everyone and now we're moving onto the second part of our main body planning.

We are not going to plan for the jobs section.

So this section of your plan looks just like the housing part.

So I'd like you to take a new page and turn it landscape, or just turn over the page that you were using for your housing plan and use the back of it.

And just spend a few moments drawing your table on there and writing those headings and question prompts in.

So experiences, finding a job, and emotions go along the top and down below experiences those prompts questions.

What has been your experience of finding a job or how have you been treated by colleagues or employers? So pause the video when you do that.

Okay, well done everybody.

Hopefully we've all paused the video and our plans and are now ready to go.

Now again, we're going to try and do some recalling of the facts that we learned in an earlier lesson.

Was it easy or difficult for the Windrush generation to find jobs when they arrived in Britain? Think back, you're right it was difficult.

Can you remember why? spend a few moments just thinking back if the answer doesn't come two streets away, just pause and keep on thinking deeper and deeper.

Why was it difficult for them to find work? Okay everybody, if you can remember then you can jot some ideas down.

And I would like you to pause the video while you add some of your ideas to your plan.

And if you're not sure, and you've spent some time really carefully thinking back then we're going to show my ideas.

So remember finding a job was difficult because lots of people were trained as professionals in Jamaica, but their qualifications didn't count or were not recognised in Britain.

So that meant that either you would have to go back and retrain for the job that you already knew how to do, or you would have to take lower paid or unskilled work which didn't have the same opportunities for promotion.

So on my plan remember we're still writing as Sonya.

So, "I worked as a nurse in Jamaica, "but my qualifications aren't recognised in Britain." There is a contraction of are not becomes aren't.

"I've applied to countless," meaning lots of, "hospitals but rejected by all them." Rejected means I was told no by all of them.

"I finally find a job working in maintenance in a hospital." So and I've got a list of what my role is.

So, "Colon keeping wards clean comma, "fixing problems with equipment "and making sure resources are stopped.

"Whether it is low or minimal pay." So I would like you to spend some time now thinking about what challenges you have faced, you do not need to write the exact same thing as me in your plan, I want you to be a little bit more creative.

So a lot of people who had travelled over on the Windrush took jobs as cleaners as well.

And what was your character's previous job in Jamaica? You can make up what qualifications they had.

Okay everybody, so pause the video while you do that.

Okay, well done everyone.

So we should all have something in our finding a job section of our plan and now we're going to discuss how it made us feel.

So I have put disheartened, frustrated, and exhausted.

I'm exhausted because I'm working so many hours every day, but because I'm not getting paid very much, it doesn't really feel like I'm getting anywhere.

I'm never going to be able to afford a house on this minimal pay.

I'm feeling frustrated because I am a trained nurse and I have to take a job that I am overqualified for.

And I feel disheartened.

This is not what I expected, the job situation in Britain to be like I came here because I was told that the job opportunities were going to be better than those Jamaica.

So now pause your video to add any ideas to your plan, you can by some ideas from me, but we came up with so much vocabulary about emotions and some show-not-tell perhaps that it would be a shame for you to only use what I've got.

Make sure you are as creative as possible, and then you can press play once you're finished.

Okay everyone, that brings us to the end of our lesson.

So we should leave today's lesson with a really solid plan for the housing and the jobs section of your main body for your letter.

Well done for all of your hard work.