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Hello everyone, and welcome to today's lesson.

My name, is Miss Smith.

In the lesson today, we're going to do some free writing, which means that, for lots of the lesson, you will be independently writing using your planning, from our previous, lessons.

So these are my favourite sorts of lessons, because you get to show off everything, that you, have, previously practised, and of, all effort that you've put into your plan.

So hopefully, you'll really enjoy the lesson, and let's get started.

We will begin with some sentence practise, practise writing complex sentence, before we get ready, for writing.

So, a big chunk of independent writing, means you need to be really prepared, as you'll think about everything you need, so that your writing is as successful as possible.

And then you'll spend lots of this lesson, writing, the narrative scene, we have previously planned.

So that means you definitely need something to write on, either an exercise book or some lined paper, a pencil or a pen, and really focused, and your brain switched on, and ready for learning today.

Pause, and go and get any of those things now, if you need to.

So let's start, by writing, a relative, clause complex sentence, for this image.

Let's break that term, relative clause complex sentence, down a little bit and think first of all, of what it means to write a complex sentence.

So complex sentence, has a main clause, which is the main there, and its subordinate clause.

Here's a sentence, that I have written for this image.

Let's just read it.

The courageous explorer, who was accompanied, by his leopard-daemon, trudged steadily across the icy terrain.

So first job, can you just, find the main clause, the part that makes sense on its own, and the subordinate clause? So we got to read and think.

So the main clause, is the green part, of my sentence.

The courageous explorer, trudged steadily across the icy terrain.

That could be a sentence all on its own.

It makes sense on its own.

The subordinate clause is the underlined part, who was accompanied, by his leopard-daemon.

Now in this sentence, this is a relative clause.

Relative clauses start with relative pronouns.

And the relative pronoun, in this clause is who.

And it's likely to be who, because, it's about a person.

This image shows us Lord Asriel and Stelmaria.

So your extra information on your relative clause, is likely to begin with a who, the relative pronoun, who.

And so, I've popped here, to help you to write this sentence, the planning from our previous lesson, where we looked at this image, in more detail.

You've probably got your planning, to handle it as well.

So we've got verbs, adjectives, and other things, than with those are from your plannings, for this particular image.

And those things are going to help you, to write, a complex sentence, with a relative clause, for this image.

So pause the video, and have a go at that now.

Okay, and this is going to be a really, useful sentence for you, because this image comes up in your writing today.

And so, I want you to add this relative clause, complex sentence, that you've just written, to your plan, for this image, so that you have the sentence ready, for your writing.

It's going to feel so good, when you get to this part of the scene, and you've already got an excellent complex sentence to add.

So pause, and add your sentence to the right parts, of your plan.

So lets remind ourselves of the scene that you're going to be writing today.


Kingdom of the icebergs.

We shall have to watch ourselves Stelmaria.

You can bet that Coulter woman has hired every samojed-bandit from here to the pole to hunt us down.

So let's just look at the sequence of this scene, having watched it.

It begins with the opening, dramatic scenery, of Svalbard, and then we're introduced to, Lord Asriel and Stelmaria who come into, the scene, before the gunshots hits the snow, and, real drama takes over where there's a chase, through the crevasse, and Lord Asriel is, surrounded.

This is the scene that we've already planned.

It is really important, that you are totally ready, for your writing today.

So let's just check, that you've got some, important spellings, written down accurately, in your plan.

And, the three most important spellings, because they are words, we've probably not come across before, now the names of, characters in the scene and places.

Lord Asriel, Stelmaria, his daemon and Svalbard, which is where they are.

So, just check, you've got those spellings, noted down, and that they all have, a capital letter, because they are proper nouns.

And, we need to think about the structure, of this writing.

So when you're writing a whole scene, you need to break it down, into smaller chunks, so that you can really focus on, one task at a time.

And at the very beginning, you're going to think, about describing, the setting of Svalbard.

And all of your planning, supports you in describing, the scenery in that opening point.

And then, you're going to move on to, introduce the character to the scene, and your characters in this scene, are Lord Asriel and Stelmaria, and it zooms right in on them.

And there's that moment of real silence, before the drama, that you can capture, in your writing.

And then the final part, is that a dramatic changes.

And, you're going to, shift, and introduce, real drama into your writing at that point.

That's your aim today.

So if you've got your planning ready, you need to go and, find anything from, a previous lesson, where we planned, go and collect it now, you'll pause and check, you've got something, to write on and you're planning ready to support your writing.

Now, if you need to, you can refer to the planning, that we completed in our previous lesson.

So here we've got, our planning for that opening, descriptive parts, with our nouns, adjectives, and other language that could support, your writing, the planning to support introducing, the characters to the scene, and, the planning to support that dramatic chase through the ice.

So if at any point during your writing today, you want to, scroll back, and then leave the screen, on one of those planning tables, to support your writing.

That would be a really useful thing to do.

So what else might you just prepare and check is organised, before writing today, or you said you need to make sure your workspace is ready, that it's clear, and it's a good place to do your writing.

You might want to have a drink ready, because this writing task might take a little longer than previous tasks, and, try and be calm, and just enjoy it.

Writing and free writing, is something to really enjoy.

And this scene particularly, with its drama, and it's, interesting characters should be one that you hopefully, enjoy writing.

So your task now then, is to write, a narrative scene and you've said, this is a free write, So you're going to do this independently today and have the opportunity to show off, everything that you've planned.

You should use your planning to write this narrative scene.

And remember, you can always go back through the, video today, to look at the planning that, we completed in a previous lesson.

And you might also want to re-watch the video clip, at any point, to help your writing.

I've popped some other reminders on screen, consistent tense, something to think about, remember you're writing in the past tense, read through your writing frequently.

So pause, and read through your writing frequent opportunities.

And remember to just enjoy it.

Off you go when you're ready.

Well done, that's the end of today's lesson, where we have reviewed sentence practise, thoughts about how to best get ready for writing when you're doing some free writing.

And then you have written your narrative scene.

Well done.

So hopefully you've really enjoyed writing independently, writing at length today, and showing off, all of the fantastic things that you can include in your writing.

Hope you have a great rest of the day.