Evaluating and improving model essays on 'Animal Farm'
Lesson details
Learning outcome
I can use model essays to identify areas of strength and weakness to improve my own writing.
Key learning points
- Using a success criteria to look at model essays is a good way to understand and embed the expectations of writing.
- Reading model essays is a great way to find adaptable phrases and ideas for your own essays.
- Using WWW and EBI is an efficient way to identify areas of improvement.
- Rewriting model essays will help you be more critical of your own writing.
Keywords
Judicious - To be judicious is to make good and informed decisions.
Terminology - Refers to technical, subject specific language. For example, in English this might be the names of word types of language features.
Discourse markers - A word or phrase which organises writing into clear sections and ideas.
Sophisticated - In writing, sophisticated means an elevated, well written response that uses excellent vocabulary and references complex ideas.
Common misconception
There is no benefit in looking at other people's responses.
How do you feel looking at your own work? It is quite difficult to be critical of your own work, practising on model essays helps this.
Teacher tip
Using a range of models for students to compare is a good way to identify specific ways of how to improve. It demonstrates what 'even better' looks like.
Equipment
You will need access to a copy of 'Animal Farm' by George Orwell.
Content guidance
Depiction or discussion of violence or suffering
Supervision
Adult supervision recommended
Licence
Lesson video
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Prior knowledge starter quiz
6 Questions
Q1.Which of these would you not find in a three part structure for an introduction to an essay?
Q2.Which of these is not a conclusive discourse marker?
Q3.Which of these are examples of complex sentences with fronted subordinate clauses?
Q4.Match the type of context to the contextual information linked to George Orwell and 'Animal Farm'.
Orwell explores attitudes towards education.
Orwell worked for the BBC between 1941 and 1943.
Animal Farm was published in 1945.
Animal Farm uses the tradition of a fairy tale.
Q5.Complete the quotes from 'Animal Farm' by matching the start of the quote to the end of the quote.
with sheets.
rather fierce looking boar.
from side to side and whisking his tail
you do not want Jones back?
is always right.
Q6.Which character from 'Animal Farm' says: "The only good human being is a dead one."
Assessment exit quiz
6 Questions
Q1.What does the term 'judicious' mean in reference to using quotes?
Q2.What does a discourse marker do in writing?
Q3.What is 'terminology' in the context of writing?
Q4.Which sentence starter is a good way to start a thesis statement?
Q5.In 'Animal Farm', what literary technique is used in the phrase "he could turn black into white"?
Q6.When referring to introductions, what does the phrase 'moves from the general to the specific' mean?
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