Revising and editing 'Animal farm' essays
Lesson details
Learning outcome
I can use effective strategies to revise and improve an essay.
Key learning points
- Topic sentences need to be clear and linked to the question.
- Main and supporting quotations from the text are used to justify arguments.
- Responses should avoid re-telling the plot.
- Revising and editing your essays is an important part of the writing process.
- Analysis should be linked to the writer’s purpose and comment on choices.
Keywords
Cohesive - In writing, if the structure is cohesive it is clear how the parts fit together. It has a clear introduction, middle and conclusion.
Chronological - To arrange things in the order of which they happen in time.
Discourse marker - A word or phrase which organises writing into clear sections and ideas.
Elevate - You are elevating something if you are making it higher, or in the case of writing making it better.
Common misconception
Once an essay is completed it's not worth thinking about again.
Revisiting our own essays can make feedback become really personalised and allow you to work and focus on your own targets.
Teacher tip
Using your own knowledge of students, this lesson can be adapted to focus on personalised needs and specific areas of improvement.
Equipment
You will need access to a copy of 'Animal Farm' by George Orwell.
Content guidance
Depiction or discussion of violence or suffering
Supervision
Adult supervision recommended
Licence
except where otherwise stated. See Oak's terms & conditions (Collection 2).Lesson video
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Prior knowledge starter quiz
6 Questions
Q1.Which word refers to the statement that appears in an introduction and presents your overarching argument?
Q2.Complete this quote from 'Animal Farm': "The others said of Squealer that he could turn ."
Q3.Match the characters from 'Animal Farm' to the quote that describes them.
"a majestic-looking pig"
"was now a mature boar of twenty-four stone"
"was best at writing"
"the foolish, pretty white mare"
"the oldest animal on the farm and the worst tempered"
"a stout motherly mare"
Q4.In 'Animal Farm' what are Boxer's maxims?
Q5.From 'Animal Farm', what terminology would identify the method in this quote: "The animals worked like slaves."
Q6.Starting with the first, put the plot points from 'Animal Farm' in chronological order.
Assessment exit quiz
6 Questions
Q1.What is a cohesive structure in relation to writing?
Q2.Which of the following is a discourse marker?
Q3.What is the purpose of using supporting quotations in an analytical paragraph?
Q4.Which of these does not belong in the success criteria for an analytical paragraph?
Q5.What device has been used in this quote from 'Animal Farm'? ''Surely, Comrades, you don't want Jones back?"
Q6.Which sentence offers the best analysis of Squealer's use of rhetorical question in this quote from 'Animal Farm'? ''Surely, Comrades, you don't want Jones back?'
To help you plan your 10 English lesson on: Revising and editing 'Animal farm' essays, download all teaching resources for free and adapt to suit your pupils' needs...
To help you plan your 10 English lesson on: Revising and editing 'Animal farm' essays, download all teaching resources for free and adapt to suit your pupils' needs.
The starter quiz will activate and check your pupils' prior knowledge, with versions available both with and without answers in PDF format.
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The assessment exit quiz will test your pupils' understanding of the key learning points.
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