Using feedback to improve dystopian descriptions
Lesson details
Learning outcome
I can use feedback to improve specific aspects of my descriptive writing.
Key learning points
- Sentence level accuracy includes spelling, punctuation, sentence structures, syntax and fluency
- Re-writing a section of your descriptive writing is important as it shows a good understanding of the feedback
- It is important to understand where a mistake is, so that it can be avoided in the next piece of descriptive writing
Keywords
Grammar - Grammar refers to the rules about how words change and combine to make accurate sentences.
Tense - A verb’s tense will tell you whether the action happened in the past, present or future.
Foreboding - A feeling of something bad about to happen can be described as a feeling of foreboding.
Homophones - If two words are pronounced the same way but spelled differently they can be described as homophones (e.g. here and hear).
Desolate - If a place is uninhabited and gives an impression of bleak emptiness, it can be described as desolate.
Common misconception
That the first draft is the final draft.
The best writing is achieved through a cycle of initial creation, feedback and re-drafting.
Teacher tip
Students could have written lots of dystopian descriptions. Consider using one of their own earlier pieces for feedback in learning cycle 2 rather than the student model.
Content guidance
Depiction or discussion of sensitive content
Supervision
Adult supervision recommended
Licence
Lesson video
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Prior knowledge starter quiz
6 Questions
Q1.What is the process of reading our work once finished, to check for mistakes, known as?
Q2.Match these punctuation marks to their definition.
goes before a list or explanation.
indicates a pause between two independent, related clauses.
interrupt a sentence to give extra information.
Q3.Which punctuation mark is usually used after expressing emotion?
Q4.What piece of punctuation is missing from this sentence: 'The building now engulfed in flames stood out like a beacon on the horizon.'?
Q5.Which of the below is the best definition of the word 'desolate'? Here it is used in a sentence: 'The once thriving town was now desolate'.
Q6.If you have a feeling of foreboding then you are convinced that...
Assessment exit quiz
6 Questions
Q1.Which of the following is NOT a good reason to proofread?
Q2.What is being described here: 'The rules about how words change and combine to make accurate sentences.'?
Q3.The words 'buy', 'bye', and 'by' all sound identical but are spelled differently. As such they are...
Q4.A verb's will tell you whether the action happened in the past, present or future.
Q5.What pronoun is missing from this sentence: 'They slowly marched through the barren streets, anticipating the misery that lay before '?
Q6.Which teacher target below is the most clear and specific in relation to descriptive writing?
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The starter quiz will activate and check your pupils' prior knowledge, with versions available both with and without answers in PDF format.
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The assessment exit quiz will test your pupils' understanding of the key learning points.
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